Just a rhyme on something I feel 'are mistakes always bad', why on earth is it that perfection is always looked up to, while flaws condemned...
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Hi Benaifer.I think this is one of your best works so far.But just a suggestion i feel that somtimes there is more to life then just sadness and im sure you are trying to capture the harsh side to life.There is a lot of truth in what you say,but then cant there be positive aswell in your work.That would help to break the monotony once in a while.im not saying that what you write is not worth reading,infact most people would relate to what you say.i love the truth in your words.You are a fine writer.
Start was awsome...but later part of the poem became boring and dull...why did you do that :( it was going so fine....creating such a fantasy...if you were to break it..should've done it with another fantasy...or just plain reality..you stretched it too long...
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Hi Benaifer.I think this is one of your best works so far.But just a suggestion i feel that somtimes there is more to life then just sadness and im sure you are trying to capture the harsh side to life.There is a lot of truth in what you say,but then cant there be positive aswell in your work.That would help to break the monotony once in a while.im not saying that what you write is not worth reading,infact most people would relate to what you say.i love the truth in your words.You are a fine writer.
Well, to seek perfection in this ain't a good idea for sure;)
Impressive...
Keep it rolin;)
PS: Do look into spellos and construction(Sorry,couldn't resist)
Start was awsome...but later part of the poem became boring and dull...why did you do that :( it was going so fine....creating such a fantasy...if you were to break it..should've done it with another fantasy...or just plain reality..you stretched it too long...
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