The poem is well immersed in deep emotions and those too very brilliantly captured. This seems to be one of those poems where the stress had been on the imaginative element of the mind. The feelings are portrayed very beautifully. One suggestion I would like to put here, regarding the way you express the ordinary things in so simple way. Sometimes the simplicity bore comes to ordinary for the words themselves. Keep the imaginative part strengthened and let the abstraction rule.
whoa! so much reminds me of the bards line of the 'world being a stage'.. brilliant poem..it gives a peek at what goes behind the masks, n in the minds of people who perform for an audience. a common thread runs through the poem, of art being a vent to express supressed emotions..have felt the same while writing my poems.. there is one line that i would say could be improved on:
'she moves crazily from night to noon'. the word crazily seems to be a bit out of touch with the general mellowed mood of the poem..
as for the images..i dunno where u source them..but they suit the theme like a picture-perfect frame, pieces of a jigsaw puzzle that come together to create a whole..n its true for every post..
keep blogging n posting such poems..for they give us so much to think upon :)
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The poem is well immersed in deep emotions and those too very brilliantly captured. This seems to be one of those poems where the stress had been on the imaginative element of the mind. The feelings are portrayed very beautifully.
One suggestion I would like to put here, regarding the way you express the ordinary things in so simple way. Sometimes the simplicity bore comes to ordinary for the words themselves. Keep the imaginative part strengthened and let the abstraction rule.
Bravo though!
Levid
whoa! so much reminds me of the bards line of the 'world being a stage'..
brilliant poem..it gives a peek at what goes behind the masks, n in the minds of people who perform for an audience.
a common thread runs through the poem, of art being a vent to express supressed emotions..have felt the same while writing my poems..
there is one line that i would say could be improved on:
'she moves crazily from night to noon'. the word crazily seems to be a bit out of touch with the general mellowed mood of the poem..
as for the images..i dunno where u source them..but they suit the theme like a picture-perfect frame, pieces of a jigsaw puzzle that come together to create a whole..n its true for every post..
keep blogging n posting such poems..for they give us so much to think upon :)
Nice poem!! Aren't dentists artists too? :)
Just kidding... I think its one nice poem, keep on posting!
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